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*If anyone has read my chapter one, as well as this, I just would like an opinion on if you guys think I should change it to 1st person. I ...

My waterfalls, My dripping, lazily In a forest of cumquat trees. Lips moist with anticipation. Waiting for the arrival of your Poetic tongue. Starving for a string of words To ...

I don't know what this is so yeah... I can't stand it anymore! Just die stop laying in the hospital bed Just die you're killing me on the inside Sickness, ...

Lol, I'm gonna re crit this. I re read my other crit and it wasn't really a helpful one. Now, here's a real crit :wink: I really do like this ...

I really enjoyed this. This seems like you're wanting to be with the perfect guy. The one you truely love. I really thought it was a sweet and well done ...

I hate my life I hate it so bad I wanna cry I never want to be anyone I just rather be gone. "Please dear God, Save me from this ...

This is a really great story. There's not a lot of details on Anna and Craig as of yet, so in Chapter 2, there should be little more details about ...

You keep telling me That you want to forget The pain. So why not Give it a try? You say that It's easier said Than done. But you never tried. ...

I'm not sure on how this is child abuse, it sounds as the wife is the one who gets beaten. This could be the start of something, like the wife ...

*Claps hands* Awesome story Lindsay...I loved it. If your teacher gives you a bad grade on this, they suck lol... But it really is an excellent story :) Congratz on ...

I liked this. I liked how you explained your exact thoughts on love. I really thought this was good, but you repeated the same thing over again in different words. ...